There once was a woman from the moon who came to Earth to save it from impending doom. She had beauty that could not be erased and her destiny was to save the human race. Then she fell in love with the enemy and had to choose between him and what was meant to be. He promised her riches and promised her a good life but for her something deep down was not right. She prayed to the goddess of the moon and said," Oh what shall I do." The moon replied, " Follow your heart and the rest will come to you." The woman got up from her knees with a sigh of relief and knew what needed to come next. She ran to find him to try and turn him good so they could be together. Then the news finally spread sharing he was shot in the imminent war and his life held on by a thread. She could not believe this is what could be and fell to tears soon after. The newspapers the next day said he tried to save Earth and sacrificed himself for the greater good. Everyone was in disbelief. They did not believe there was any good in him because he constantly acted like his awful father Ken. The woman couldn't believe this is what their fate ended up being. She realized it was not her fate to save the world and that it was the man whose life was taken too soon. What the town soon learned is to not judge someone's character too soon because you never know what they were going through. The man was kind hearted deep down inside but was hovered by an evil man his whole life. He always wanted to save the world but never wanted his father to know. His life was taken sneaking on the battle field and now others can exist after him.
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Author's Note:
The short story that I wrote was inspired by a nursery rhyme. It begins with a man being from the moon and tumbling down here on Earth. Instead of a man I changed it to a woman who came down from the moon. The next part of the nursery rhyme says he is looking for his way to Norwich. I decided I wanted to go with a more dramatic approach by adding a woman who is looking for a man she loves. The nursing rhyme ends with him getting burned by some cold porridge. Instead of adding that she was physically burned, I decided to make my character emotionally burnt by the passing of her loved one. I wanted my story to have a moral to it. The man she loved was judged and seen as the enemy. In reality he was a good man but wrongly accused.
Bibliography. "The man and The Moon" from Nursery Rhyme Book by Andrew Lang.
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I really like how you changed the nursery rhyme's meaning. The change of situation such as 'saving the world' rather than looking for a lover really gave more purpose to the story. Not that searching for a lover is a meaningless thing to do. I really enjoyed the description and how you changed the plot from an individual's quest of love to a global situation. It was intriguing and a good read.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you took the nursery rhyme and made it more dramatic and meaningful. It is cool seeing how different people interpret and view things differently, I would have never had the creativity to make the deep story you wrote from that childrens nursery rhyme! I really enjoyed it. I also liked how you made it rhyme just like it's original! It made the words flow and sound nice together which made the effect of the story as a whole more vivid.
ReplyDeleteIt’s crazy to think that you spun this story out of a nursery rhyme about someone getting burned by cold porridge, but I love what you’ve turned this into. The way the story’s rhyme pattern mirrored the nursery structure gave it an almost whimsical air and provides a nice hook to draw readers into the story, and I think it’s really cool, the way you present the facts in a way that mostly skims the surface but also hints at all sorts of depth waiting just underneath. Very nice job with this!
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